Jacob the avali Chapter 1: I woke up in my dorm, I checked my alarm clock and it read 11: 30 AM, I had my promotion to protector scheduled at 11:45 AM, I ran over to my locker in my pajamas grabbed my uniform and ran to a changing room. After that I ran to the hall of the protectors, I was extremely nervous but I waddled into the room, 15 minutes later after I had been given the protector badge, I heard a loud rumbling sound, and the room was shaking, dust fell from the ceiling and then it burst open. Giant red tentacles were filling the room, the strange device known as the matter manipulator was sitting on the ground on top of a pile of rubble that used to be it's pedestal. I grabbed it and ran, I made it as far as the storage room where I found a crate with a rusted sword, and in the doorway to the outside of the building was a smaller tentacle. I charged at it with my sword and sliced at it until it retracted itself, outside I saw a landing pad with a beaten up ship, I knew it was a long shot that it would still work, but I hopped inside and to my luck it turned on, my flight skills were rusty but I took off and left earth, I went to the nearest start which was about 4.37 light years away, I went there in hope of escaping whatever eldritch abomination destroyed earth. As I was about one million kilometers from a planet, an asteroid hit me, I was pulled into the planet's orbit and the intertial dampeners were not functional, as I entered the atmosphere I though my end was near, I heard a loud whoosh and felt some drag, the parachutes somehow were still functional, the ship landed on the ground, I leaned back into the pilot seat and blacked out.
Dude Space that text a bit, do paragraphs instead of a text wall, else nobody's gonna read you Furthermore, as an advice, I hope ya gotta bone to pick somewhere, cos for now you just re-telling the game's intro
Thanks I worked in the whitespace some I need as much advice as I can get Because I am a novice at writing.