Diary of a Lone Avali [Discontinued]

Discussion in 'Writing' started by Gilligan Lanley, Dec 20, 2015.

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What's your opinion of the story so far?

  1. Great!

    66.7%
  2. Okay.

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  3. Decent..

    5.6%
  4. Needs more work.

    0 vote(s)
    0.0%
  5. GIB MEH MOAR!!!

    38.9%
  6. Pinapple (You know who you are <3)

    22.2%
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  1. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Ohhhhh, that poses a problem.

    Let's get back on topic here, mkay.
     
  2. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Okay. BLARGHGHGHHGHGHGG!!!! WHEN WILL THE NEXT LOG COME OUT!?!?!?!?!? BLARGHHGHHGHGHGGHHG!!!!!!!
    ^ me expressing my frustration
     
  3. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Theory crafting engage:

    •Nezun will marry Mira( why is that what I would expect? Well... Its expected to happen)

    •Nezun goes blind

    •Nezun learns telekinesis

    •Nezun uses the force

    •Nezun becomes a Mary Sue

    •Nezun becomes OP
     
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  4. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Hmm. You know the bb code for bullet points, right?
     
  5. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Fixed yo.
     
  6. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Better
    •Awesome
    •Log
    •will
    •be
    •next

    I didnt use bb code for the bullet points, I used ALT.
     
  7. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Now @Solar313 here me out on this one...

    Avali/Floran mutant baby hybrids...

    Guarantee!
    Confirmed!
     
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  8. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    Hmm. Avali, but feathers five part plant life, five part feather. Mouth of a Floran. Interesting.
     
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  9. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    His/her/there names are...

    Foodasad...
    Fingledoof..
    Gringiff...
    Glumboof...
    Gringledoof...
     
    Last edited: Mar 12, 2016
  10. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    What the hell guys? :rofl:

    Only time will tell what will happen.
     
  11. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Avali/Floran hybrids, maaaan.

    They do some weeeeird shit.

    Also, check out last post for stupid names for the children...
     
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  12. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    BLAAARRGGHHGHGHGYYAAAGH
     
  13. Solar313

    Solar313 Fat Man

    I would never give a child one of those names. It would be horrible to have a name like that. But still, funny. Its like "Shh! Gringledoof is sleeping!"
     
  14. Lodish

    Lodish Black Hole Surfer

    Glumboof! Go make your homework!

    (these names tho)
     
  15. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    Important announcement! Warning! Wall of Text:

    After much thought (and a lot of Karaoke), I have decided to discontinue Diary of a Lone Avali.
    tl;dr: I'm rewriting the story on a different thread. Thanks for reading this one, go read the other one once it's up.

    Now, before you lay me to the torch and pitchfork, hear me out. I've been thinking on this a while, around log 5 to be exact. As much as I enjoyed the monologue/diary format, I feel like that I've limited myself in writing the story. I tried to change up the format into something different, from a standard log format to more of audio logs (ala Bioshock). With the recent unreleased (and unfinished) log, I tired to implement another gimmick to try and flesh out the world. With some feedback from others, the consensus was the it seemed rather forced. This made me fairly dishearten as that's what I wanted to avoid.

    So, in saying all of that, I WILL continue Nezun's adventures. (Hip-hip-hooray!) What I plan on doing is going back to the start and rewrite the story in a traditional story format (third person).

    I'm currently unsure as to what I'm actually going to name the story as of now, but I have a few ideas floating around in my head. I'll be posting up a poll in a different thread and a placeholder title to let you guys decide, along with placing a link both on my profile here on the site and here on this thread once I put it up. 'cause, convenience.

    I will also be keeping this story up on the forums, but will edit the title as to let others know that this thread is going to be discontinued.

    I would like to thank everyone for the support and the feedback you guys have been giving me. I hope that you will understand where I'm coming from with this and that you will enjoy the new story just as much as this one.

    -Gilligan
     
    Last edited: Mar 13, 2016
  16. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Okay first...


    Second we need to talk in the convo, since this news has been brought up.

    Still I'm glad your restarting...
    Just don't cut the characters.
     
    Last edited: Mar 13, 2016
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  17. Master Automan IV

    Master Automan IV Phantasmal Quasar

    Wait a minute...
    Thats not a good video for this...
    Ima gonna change it.
     
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  18. Lodish

    Lodish Black Hole Surfer

    So you will rewrite the story from the beginning with a third person perspective?
     
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  19. Gilligan Lanley

    Gilligan Lanley Space Kumquat

    Yessum.
     
  20. Combozone

    Combozone Existential Complex

    i actually think is a great idea, i personally felt that the diary format you had laid out really limited your storytelling
    now that you can do it from a third person perspective, it should let you expand and detail a lot more in your stories (which is what i missed most about your diaries)
    all in all, good idea, hope it works out
     
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